The organizer of the annual festival is going to organize the festival in your place. Write a letter to the organizer giving feedback for last year and suggestions for this year. In your letter, you should: give your feedback for the last festival tell me what you can do for the new festival suggestions about the new festival.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter concerning the yearly festival being held at my house on the 20th of April 2020. I am so thrilled after knowing that
this
year’s fair is to be organised at my home.
Last
year, it was splendid and astonishing. Everything was well organized and synchronized perfectly, and particularly the plethora of cuisines displayed at the fair was awe-inspiring.
Moreover
, the ambience of the entire fair was glamorous and elegant. Let me explain about myself a bit. I
am
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an event manager for the past 5 years and
hence
I have managed various college events and
conference
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previously.
Furthermore
, I have some connections that could assist you in
this
event,
for instance
, there are a few disc jockeys in my contact who are incredibly talented and affordable.
Additionally
, if you have any issues with the decoration do let me know, I know some decorators and suppliers who can provide items required efficiently and at a low cost.
Also
, If there are any requirements to be done, please don’t hesitate to contact me.
Although
the previous year's festival was astounding,
but
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I had a few suggestions to upgrade the enthusiasm even more,
for example
, including a singing and dancing competition would be zealous.
In addition
to
this
, even though the variety of cuisine presented was
amazing
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as the former festival,
but
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adding a live kitchen would enhance the serving experience to another level. Let me know what you think of my ideas. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi
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You have addressed the task requirements effectively, providing feedback and suggestions for the festival.
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Well-structured introduction and conclusion.
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Clear and relevant ideas presented in the letter.

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