The organizer of the annual festival is going to organize the festival in your place. Write a letter to the organizer giving feedback for last year and suggestions for this year. In your letter, you should: give your feedback for the last festival tell me what you can do for the new festival suggestions about the new festival.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter concerning the yearly festival being held at my house on the 20th of April 2020. I am so thrilled after knowing that

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year’s fair is to be organised at my home.

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year, it was splendid and astonishing. Everything was well organized and synchronized perfectly, and particularly the plethora of cuisines displayed at the fair was awe-inspiring.

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, the ambience of the entire fair was glamorous and elegant. Let me explain about myself a bit. I

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an event manager for the past 5 years and

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I have managed various college events and

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previously.

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, I have some connections that could assist you in

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event,

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, there are a few disc jockeys in my contact who are incredibly talented and affordable.

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, if you have any issues with the decoration do let me know, I know some decorators and suppliers who can provide items required efficiently and at a low cost.

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, If there are any requirements to be done, please don’t hesitate to contact me.

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the previous year's festival was astounding,

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I had a few suggestions to upgrade the enthusiasm even more,

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, including a singing and dancing competition would be zealous.

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, even though the variety of cuisine presented was

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as the former festival,

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adding a live kitchen would enhance the serving experience to another level. Let me know what you think of my ideas. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi

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Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity and structure.

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Try to vary sentence structures for better fluency and coherence.

task achievement

You have addressed the task requirements effectively, providing feedback and suggestions for the festival.

coherence cohesion

Well-structured introduction and conclusion.

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Clear and relevant ideas presented in the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

264 words

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