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Band 2

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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From now on, no one will purchase
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books
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 or newspapers because they
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. We can not deny that nowadays
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 of
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users
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 online reading platforms
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 dramatically increased. But we can never be 100
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 sure that no one will ever use
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books
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 again in future because there is
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 of people who prefer
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 way of reading. From my
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 I strongly agree with
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 tend to believe that
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 amount of
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 will always prefer
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 of people will choose
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books
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 and newspapers because of several reasons.
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, reading is a
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kind of therapy and
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 way of taking break from everything technological. Constant online reading may cause
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 effect on our eyesight and can give painful headaches. But reading
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 rests
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not only
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 from radiation.

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task response
Your view is clear: you mostly agree, but you say some people will still buy paper books. However, the essay is too short and does not fully answer the question. Add one full main part about why free online reading may make paper sales fall, and another about why paper reading will remain.
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Explain your ideas more. For example, say that online texts are easy to get, cheap, and can be read at any time. Then explain why some people still like paper books, such as comfort, focus, or the feel of a real book.
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Use examples that clearly support your point. You can mention students who use free online news every day, but also parents or older people who buy books for home reading.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start and one body part, but it needs more parts and a final ending. Write a short ending that repeats your main view in a direct way.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Your first body part is about paper reading, so add a new paragraph only about online reading and why it may replace many paid paper texts.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show the flow of your ideas: “First”, “Also”, “However”, “For example”, and “In the end”. This will make the writing easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because the words are not in a clear order. For example, write “The number of users on online reading sites has risen a lot” instead of “nowadays number of the users in the online reading platforms are dramatically increased.”
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You give a clear personal view and do not fully accept the idea that paper books will disappear.
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Your point about paper reading as a break from screens is useful and fits the question.
coherence and cohesion
The opening tells the reader what your main view will be.
coherence and cohesion
You use “For instance” and “But” to connect some of your ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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