Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Could you imagine the world without advertising? Which products you have bought by advertising? Obviously, people become aware about
products
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the products
by influence of advertising.
In addition
,
power
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the power
of advertising made
large amount
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a large amount
large amounts
of sales in popular consumer goods. In fact, some of those products are not vital to the
shoppers but
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shoppers, but
they are sold because of impacting the
power
of advertising. I suppose, advertising has been played intensively in selling consumer goods. In order to
advertising
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advertise
could depict the products as different by exaggeration.
Furthermore
, advertising could make the sense of needing in shoppers. Two years ago, my wife, Sahar, and I went to a big mall for buying daily foods. There was a huge banner which illustrated a new
oven
.
Then
we saw noisy people rounded a woman who shows the differences in
new
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the new oven
oven
. Sahar, pushed me to see what is happening there. After a few seconds, I realized that out former
oven
has the same facilities as well as. There were no specific
differences but
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differences, but
why my wife thought there are amazing facilities
in
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with
new
oven
? Regarding to the case, advertising able to persuade people to buy new products because
this
is a fabulous product that you need it. Meanwhile, many goods are not the real need of society, but advertising could push people to try it once.
However
, advertising could not force you to buy
goods but
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goods, but
are able to make sense of needing.
Therefore
, it would be possible that you realize that “I will need it a day”.
This
is the
power
of advertising that persuade people to buy goods that they do not need. As I remember, at the end of shopping journey the cashier said: “You will put into the lottery for having a new Beemer by purchasing
this
bubble-gum which are new”. Eventually, we approved that to add the bubble-gum to the basket.
Nevertheless
, even though, the
power
of advertising to high sales of consumer goods is undeniable, I hope people
be
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are
were
are being
have been
aware about advertising and
ones
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the ones
that want to defraud them.
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