WRITING TASK2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is important to consider whether earning money for a number of famous and productive sports professionals is vital. While many people often depict that people, especially successful ones, in sports

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should earn more money than professionals in another sector, others think it would be an injustice for everyone. In

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essay, I will discuss both the views with pertinent examples and I tend to agree with the former argument.

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and foremost, gaining more financial wealth for a seasoned player leaves a negative impact on society.

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is a problem because these players earn huge respect and popularity later on among mass people, whereas many important professionals do not recognise even after a major contribution.

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, becoming politicians has become a common phenomenon after the retirement of South Asia cricketers and for

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reason, local people, who worked in politics entirely, get suffered and

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might not be equitable for other

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-oriented executive, who is not being like a famous player.

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, a successful sports person should earn enough wealth for his/her

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, despite having a very good salary structure and other financial benefits, a footballer or cricket might not be able to earn after a certain age. As they are bound to retire at a certain point which is quite early than other professions, no other lucrative

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would not be possible to secure other than coaching.

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days of these stars may not seem to be fruitful if they do not start investing their

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earning in somewhere else. To sum up, earning and creating a fortune of wealth may look sensible to secure the

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after getting retired of

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path though few individuals would be deprived from fair and equitable treatments because of the success and popularity of sports people. In my opinion, as a basketball or a football player has to risk not only their lives, but

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, earning a great deal of money is somewhat justified.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

344 words

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