Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater ,is a waste of money . Government must the money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this situation?

#government #investment #arts #music #theater #waste #money #services #situation

Government

plays a significant role in human development

Accept space

Some people think that

government

spend

Suggestion

spends

money

theater

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

and music is a wastage of

money

instead

they must spend

this

money

in civil service. I agree with

this

statement.

Government

invest

Suggestion

invests

is investing

money

highway system

Suggestion

the highway system

because road service is not well infrastructure and large

patholes

(nontechnical usage) a tiny piece of anything

particles

and slugs on

road

Suggestion

the road

Government

should spend

money

to improve highway

syastem

instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity

system

systems

because it

improve

Suggestion

improves

transportation and

problems

Suggestion

the problems

which face by travellers who towards their destination. It

also help

Suggestion

also helps

has also helped

the travellers to reach on time. Moving

further

, if

government

Suggestion

the government

also spend

Suggestion

also spends

money

in education

organisation

Accept comma addition

organisation, for

for

example in

Accept comma addition

example, in

government

schools and colleges to improve their infrastructure and teaching way. The

government

invest

Suggestion

invests

has invested

is investing

money

gave

Suggestion

give

advance technology facilities in

government school

Suggestion

government schools

a government school

to give students advance knowledge. In

this

government

schools

Suggestion

school

students get better job opportunities. If a person

get

Suggestion

gets

a better job so

they

of them or themselves

their

financial support their parents. To elaborate

Accept space

educational system

Suggestion

the educational system

india

a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

is not well

this

is the reason the

india

either extremity of something that has length

end

indie

idea

is not counted in successful countries. On the other side, some people think that

government

invest

Suggestion

invests

money

in the art

such

as music and

theater

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

is not a

wastage

Suggestion

waste

money

because entertainment sources is

also

very important for life. It is

joyfulplace

Suggestion

a joyful place

joyful place

for people to visit

theater

Suggestion

the theatre

theatre

tgeir

of them or themselves

their

weekend and relax from their stressful lives. People spend their leisure time with their families and

friend

Suggestion

friends

. To conclude, improvement in

education system

Suggestion

the education system

most important source

Suggestion

the most important source

a most important source

for investing

money

rather than spend

money

in entertainment sources.

Submitted by surindervirk1118 on Wed Apr 08 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

256 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The mandatory military service is considered as a good idea for all nations, as many countries have applied this program for young men after they graduated. Some people suggested that this idea would also be possible for women. I agree this program would bring positive impact for the national securities and this essay will explain my position.
4
band
In the past most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and the smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
As globalisation era, the internet is a crucial role in our life and it can use to work at home without going to the office. Some people think that it is a great innovation while others disagree.
8
band
Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some contend that politicians should be responsible for protecting the environment as there is nothing much that individuals can do about this problem. Personally, I disagree with this notion and I believe that the responsibility to protect the habitat should not fall upon only politicians because ordinary people can make significant contributions.
6.5
band
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, we cannot deny that the vast majority of people tend to consume more and more sugar on a daily basis. Moreover, a lot of manufacturers also produce food and drink products that contain high levels of sugar. Some people suggest that the best way to reduce the number of people who love sweets is to make sugary products more expensive.
4
band
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?
In today’s world, It is fact that few nations higher individuals are becoming interested in finding out about the history of , the house they are living in for there are several reasons for this think. If asked questions, Both these questions I discussed further. Discussing the first question, there are many reasons for the finding out the history of the house they are stay in? Firstly, the oldest house is very much given value as a classical house because there the old house was made by using old raw materials and some time in auction their value in money also rises. As In Vadodara city some oldest houses will be like maharaja sayaji Rao's house; However, In some old ,house there were some archaeological things for example old coin or old currency and using their oldest currency give the highest value. Referring, to the second question people also can carry out research on this subject because its subject gives classical knowledge about the house and other buildings. Suc...

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater ,is a waste of money . Government must the money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the past most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and the smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?