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Some people say that schools should spend more money on computers, others say that more money should be spent on teachers' wages.

#people #schools #money #computers #teachers #wages
Now-a-day universe is getting
digittalized
put into digital form, as for use in a computer
digitalised
.
Computer
Suggestion
The computer
 is getting evolved in every area of life.
Thats
Suggestion
That's
 why, many people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
 that school's
primiary
of first rank or importance or value; direct and immediate rather than secondary
primary
 focus should be computers and use of technology. While educational institutes have limited budget. They should not waste it on
competency
Suggestion
the competency
 of teachers. Many people oppose
this
 idea. I personally
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
, that schools should invest on to gain more positive outcomes. On the One hand, computer
litracy
the ability to read and write
literacy
 will be
necessary skill
Suggestion
a necessary skill
 in daily life of
coming days
Suggestion
the coming days
.
Person
Suggestion
The person
A person
having
Suggestion
has
is having
 a computer, have
unlimited variety
Suggestion
an unlimited variety
 of knowledge in his hand. In
current era
Suggestion
the current era
,
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
 of computer applications
are
Suggestion
is
 available to
students which
Accept comma addition
students, which
 provide a great mechanism for learning. A toddlers can find a mentor on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 who
whill
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 teach according to
students
Suggestion
students'
student's
percetion
the representation of what is perceived; basic component in the formation of a concept
perception
, while, in
classroom
Suggestion
the classroom
a classroom
 they do have limited choice. At the end students will learn more and able to be competent for
near future
Suggestion
the near future
.
On the other hand
,
provision
Suggestion
the provision
 of knowledge and making able to perform well is not only
duty
Suggestion
a duty
the duty
 to educational institutes. A number
od
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 other
resposibilites
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
 make
physical presence
Suggestion
the physical presence
 of a competent guide important.
Firstly
, brainstorming is an important skill to learn; which can be
gainded
obtain
gained
 only by a creative social
envirenment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
environments
prodeced
bring forth or yield
produced
 by a technically supervised personality.
Secondly
, many students require motivation to gain a leading role in upcoming life, which is only possible by a motivator. It is
fact
Suggestion
the fact
a fact
 that technology leading people
to
Suggestion
into
 isolation.
Therefore investment
Accept comma addition
Therefore, investment
on
Suggestion
in
 having
good teacher
Suggestion
a good teacher
 is
beat
the supreme effort one can make
best
 idea. All in all,
consumtion
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
 of budget on technology is
also
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
, but, investing
Suggestion
, but investing
on
Suggestion
in
 teachers produces
greater number
Suggestion
a greater number
 of
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
. So the primary focus of education system should be the, preserving more budget for the
capabilties
the quality of being capable -- physically or intellectually or legally
capabilities
 of
faculity
one of the inherent cognitive or perceptual powers of the mind
faculty
.
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