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Some people are born to be the leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Leaders are the one who motivate and help others by leading the task themselves. Believed by some that a lot of people are born with the
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 traits, while others think that authority is not only inherited but can
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 be learnt. In my opinion, I think a quite number of people are born to be the leaders,
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,
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 qualities can be gained from the experiences.
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, some people are born to be a
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,
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 they show their leading habit since their childhood. For examples, Rahul Gandhi, son of Indira Gandhi who was born in the
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 family and he has the
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 qualities by the age of his birth and still he has. Some people inherit the
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 quality and lead not only the business but
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 the country.
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, I have seen many people who grew up to become a fine
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.
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, Late Nelson Mandela, former president of South Africa. At that age, Black peoples were treated as slaves,
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, stood up for them and lead the nation to freedom after struggling many years in prison. It shows that
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 quality are not only inherit by genes, but
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 can be created.
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, I think that some people are mean to be a
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 of their birth, at the same time,
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 qualities can be learnt by the time and experience. In conclusion, having a blood of a head can
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 inherit their qualities,
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 experience and time can teach us to be a perfect
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