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Some people prefer to directly help people who need it in the local community; however, others prefer to give money to the national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that there are many concerns with supporting
charity
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. While many people believe that support should be provided directly to the needy in
local community
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the local community
local communities
, other people believe that it is better to give
money
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 to
charity
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 organizations. In my opinion, both of these methods have negative and positive effects. On the one hand, the main reasons why a number of people choose to give financial support straight to the impoverished are because
charity
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 organizations are not always reliable. Some
charity
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 institutions take advantages of donor’s kindness to pocket their
money
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 by transferring a part of the donation
money
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 to the local community and keeping the remain for themselves. In Vietnam,
for instance
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, even few state agencies called upon the donors contributing their financial to help the impoverished, but most of the budget often stayed in the pocket of the leaders of these organizations.
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, to ensure that the poor receive full
money
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, many donators choose to make a direct
donations
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donation
.
On the other hand
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, giving
money
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 to national or international
charity
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 organizations is beneficial in some way.
Firstly
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,
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charity
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charitable
 institutions are more professional and larger in scale. When people always want to give
they
of them or themselves
their
them
 support as many places as they can,
this
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 method can help them send
money
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 to a lot of poverty-stricken areas or countries. These communities can help people to find jobs, build houses or find their lives back.
Secondly
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, the size of these groups and the total number of volunteers are advantaged points because they can transport aid goods
such
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 as food,
money
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, clothes to hard approaching places like highland, remote areas better than individuals. In conclusion, I believe that sending
money
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 directly to who in need is a practical way to help them.
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, it is better and more effective by giving the donation to functional organizations.

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