In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience

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In many developed nations, consumerism not only about buying the everyday things people need to

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a source

of amusement.

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essay will argue that

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negative development

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a negative development

because of the detrimental effect marketing and advertising has on people and the fact that it is

extremely unproductive hobby

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an extremely unproductive hobby

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tenable

etiology

the cause of a disease

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, people buy luxury items because of the influence

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multinational

marketing campaigns have on them. People are constantly

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with messages telling them that if people buy a certain product and they will happier, more beautiful and compete. In many ways, these companies trick into buying their products, when all people need to be happy are much simpler items.

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demonstrate, fashion chains like

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Chanel

and

prada

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Prada

tell people that they are only good enough if they wear nice clothes and models to make people feel unsatisfied with their appearance. Equally

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having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue

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, shopping for goods you do not really need is

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not the most productive thing you can do with your time. Not only is it a huge waste of money, it does not nothing to develop a person either physically or

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intellectually

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activity with other popular

pasttimes

a diversion that occupies one's time and thoughts (usually pleasantly)

pastimes

like sport, reading or even watching movies, people can see how

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shopping really is. To wrap up, people should only shop for the necessities and not for pleasure because they are being manipulated by transnational companies and there are

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much more constructive ways for people to spend

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of them or themselves

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leisure time.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience

Fully explain your ideas

young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.