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Some people think that student benefits from going to private secondary schools. Others, however, feel that private schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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A good education is a constitutional focus nowadays. Some people believe that private schools are best for learners. While others contradict
this
 idea and say that it has a negative impact on the community. A nation is a mixture of rich and poor people.
However
, middle and lower classes cannot afford and they
also
 face many other problems.
Furthermore
, I will discuss both the views and elaborate on my opinion. On the one hand, some people conclude that private schools are beneficial for scholars.
In other words
, they have set their mark in education.
For example
, the beacon house school has top rank in Pakistan. Every year, 70% of tutors got selected in the medical profession.
In addition
, they have educational standards with highly skilled instructors.
As a result
, private schools are more attractive and rich families are wishing to get their child admissions.
On the other hand
, some people argue that private schools mark a negative impact on the nation.
In other words
, it is somehow true. Because the rest of the nation accepts elite class is hand to mouth. They cannot afford an expensive school and their costs. All parents wish to give their children a good education. But some obstacles are there which resist them to do so. Due to
this
, a negative impact implies to the community. To sum up, schooling is essential for all the toddlers. Elite class can straight forward do so. But the issue arises for the rest of society. There should be some separate quota for the middle and lower class, with affordable fees. So they can
also
 fulfil their kid's dream
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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