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Many peole think that it is important to go to university while others prefer to start work without getting a universty education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays the significance of having a
University
 degree to start
work
 is debatable. Some people believe that it is important to start
work
 after graduating from
University
 while others do not.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail. On the one hand, after graduating from school many teenagers have to apply to higher education in order to complete a bachelor’s degree in a field
such
 as aviation or medicine which helps them to gain enough theoretical
knowledge
 to start one’s career as a pilot or a doctor.
In addition
, a
university
 education can guarantee a successful career and bright future. After all, many employers wonder to recruit an organization from qualified employees.
Finally
, many youngsters are usually immature to face challenges which inevitably will occur at
work
 place without getting theoretical
knowledge
 that provide universities.
On the other hand
, it is a great opportunity to feel a sense of responsibility and earn money which means financial independence. There is no need to study at
university
 to
work
 as a waiter, cleaner or clerk. Because these types of jobs do not require any
knowledge
instead
 of good personal skills.
Furthermore
, many people who have their own business claim that they do not have a
university
 degree. It shows that business is usually based on one’s social skills and real experience rather than theoretical
knowledge
 that we gain at
university
. In conclusion,
university
Suggestion
the university
 provides
such
 qualifications which lead to better employment while working straight after high school enables us to earn money and gain
such
 experience quickly.
However
, in my opinion, every teenager should opt for higher education rather than working after school right away.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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