Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Based on some opinions, educating every
youngsters
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youngster
to be a good
parent
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in schools is necessary.
Perosonally
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Personally
judging, the sharp disagreement is the point of view as not only they are still lacking of
life
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experiences but
also
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the poor endurance in their mentality.
Firstly
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, when schools teach teenager how to be a good
parent
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, their
life
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experiences haven't reached the recommended level. In detail, being a good
parent
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with a view to upbringing the
next
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generations become better.
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, in the lieu of being trained qualitatively, their children may not
gained
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gain
enough advices correctly by the virtue of the shortage in
life
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experiences and the mechanical instruction in schools.
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, the level of development of children may be decreased.
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, teaching
young person
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young people
a young person
how to be a good
parent
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brings many disadvantages for new generations.
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, in spite of being taught
purposively
in a purposeful manner
purposefully
, their mentality
are
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is
still youthful. In detail, schools may educate minor ways to nurture their child.
Nontheless
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Nonetheless
, their mentality
are
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is
vulnerable to learn abilities in being patient and
endurable which
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endurable, which
every
parents
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parent
should have, at their age, learning and playing are being placed on top of their
life
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which lead to
abstract tendency
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an abstract tendency
the abstract tendency
to their babies.
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, being had
ablities
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
abilities
to become a good
parent
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is worthless. To conclude, persuading schools to teach youngsters to be a good
parent
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brings many cons for the
next
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generationl
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
generations
.
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, the ability of taking care children should be educated from their
parent
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or gained
experienced
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experience
from acquaintances is more beneficial.
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