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Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about health. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #schools #health
It is undeniable that in our modern world and
age many
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age, many
 people opine that public academies do not pay attention to pupils especially, understanding and value of
health
.Yet, others believe
school
 tutors and teachers teach young people about
health
 perfectly as possible.I
also
 completely agree for
this
 issue.I think instructors of schools always show their
bests
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best
 in all
type
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types
 of educating.In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of
this
 trend
,
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,
then
 I will give my own opinion.
First
 of all
,
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,
public education
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
,
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,
such
 as schools, kindergartens, colleges, institutes and
etc
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 play vitally important role in people's
life
. In my view, especially, schools are the most important one, because, children spent
main part
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the main part
 of their
life
 that, over 11 years in their
school
. They learn dominant things about society,
life
,
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,
nature and so on. It is true that, in every country all around the world, each
school
 starts educating
first
 about
health
, and
this
 process continues until the
school
 students graduate. Especially, teachers pay more attention about
health
 subjects after high level pupils.Let me give
an
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a
life
 example, in our
school
, teachers educate students very good in all industries, especially,
health
. The thing is they know
health
's worth unequal, that's
way
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the way
this
 industry very popular
,
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,
also
 our government equip our
school
 with all kind of equipments
,
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,
which are necessary for experiments.For
thus
denotes a person or thing
this
 reason
,
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,
majority
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the majority
 of our
school
 students have full knowledge about
first
 aid.
On the other hand
,
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,
if we look at another side of
this
 issue
,
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,
there are may be some schools in rural areas
,
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,
which are not suitable for children and these
school
's teachers have not enough experience and knowledge to teach pupils.There is the only way to solve
this
 problem, authority should attract some experienced tutors to these
school
 or create a new method of teaching. To sum up
,
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,
despite some schools, which are situated in suburban areas
,
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,
majority
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the majority
 of
school
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schools
 and their teachers have
enouh
as much as necessary
enough
 skill, ability and knowledge to educate young people on
health
.

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