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The supplied table gives information about monthly sales of various drinks at a small cafe from January to April months.

The supplied table gives information about monthly sales of various drinks at a small cafe from January to April months.
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The supplied table gives information about monthly sales of various
drinks
 at a small cafe from January to April months.
Overall
 it can be seen from the table that , the sale range in terms of all of the
drinks
 was the highest in April compared to the other months and people
more
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preferred to drink
tea
 and
coffee
 rather than the remaining types of
drinks
 during the given period. The sale starts
on
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in
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 January with
revenue
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a revenue
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of
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150 dollars for the
ice
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drinks
 and 250$ for
tea
 and
coffee
 which is more than about 40% of
revenue
 realised during the month. In January the cocktails
revenue
 seems to be showing a declining trend with $ 90.
While
 in February the figure for
revenue
 of
ice
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drinks
 and cocktails remained the same
with
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 150$ and 90$ respectively. We can observe a slight increase in
tea
 and
coffee
 sales by 20$.
On the other hand
revenue
 during March did not experience a significant change.
Juice
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 was
favored
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favoured
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by the majority of people with the highest rate, 210$. Showing an increase
on
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in
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 March
ice
drinks
 rose to 190$. Looking at April, the figure for the
revenue
 of
ice
drinks
 hit the highest point
with
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 230$,
whereas
 the sale of cocktail
drinks
were
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 approximately halved (100$)
comparing
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compared
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 with
ice
drinks
.
Tea
 and
coffee
was
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were
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 drunk a bit
fewer
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less
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with
the
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a
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revenue
 180$ rather than
other
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in other
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 months.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words drinks, tea, coffee, revenue, ice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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