The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The table gives information about, three different nations (Canada, Germany and
UK
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the UK
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) information and calculations about the change in
proportion
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the proportion
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of the
people
who are
65years
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65 years
and beyond in 1988, 2000 and 2030.
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, it can be seen that the population of elders is predicted to rise in the entire period given. The highest percentage of older
people
was in
in
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Germany, which remained at the top till 2030. The lowest
figure
of
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65years
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65 years
old
people
and above was in
UK
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. In 1988, the
figure
in Canada
of
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elders was 16.32 which rise almost above 4% in 2000 but it is expected to rise
till
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26.35 in 2030. Germany which was at the top of
figure
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of
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senior
people
in contrast
to
two
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countries begin with 20.45
after
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and after
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next
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the next
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12
years
it reached
to
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25.32.
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figure
seem
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to incline in 2030
over
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30%.
United
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Kingdom remained to be the lowest in the percentage of 65years and ahead which was under 15
percent
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(14.23% and 14.89% respectively) in 1988 and 2000 but it can jump
into
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20.35 after coming 20years from 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, figure with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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