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Some People Think That The Government Should Provide Funding For Arts. Others, However, Believe That The Money Should Be Spent On Public Health And Education. Discuss Both These Views And Give Your Own Opinion.

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The presented diagram describes the
process
 of yielding soft
cheese
. There are 5 steps of the
process
. It can be seen that the
process
 of soft
cheese
, in beginning step both water and milk are mixed with a
mixture
. After that, the
mixture
 is cooled at the temperature of a 5 degrees for 2 hours. Following
this
, the
process
 of
mixture
 sends to ferment, where is cooled at 35 degrees for 2 hours before departing to the salt. On the 4th stage the fermented
mixture
 is evaporated at the temperature of 100 degrees for 8 hours of the period. Steam is allowed throughout the outlet. In the
process
 of the final period, all material is sent for cooling at 5 degrees for 8 hours. Two filters are available ups and down fragment.
Second
 filter use for moving the waste water outside. On the other side,
first filter
Suggestion
the first filter
 is used for outside the soft
cheese
.
Thus
, from the overall analysis, it is clear that all steps of the
process
 of manufacture of soft
cheese
 are a complex involving many stages. In the initial stage of the
process
 start both water and milk, while the end up with filters.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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