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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Nowadays, we can see tons of private vehicles which have been used in order to get to the workplace, university, and other destinations.
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, we are aware of using too much gas or other types of fuels can brutally hurt the environment. So, politicians tend to legislate laws to reduce the wide usage of cars like increasing on the tax fee of individual cars. Decreasing the usage of cars, mainly leads to a fallen rate of pollution.
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, it makes two terrific sources of saving money, which is taxes that will be taken from the owners.
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, the need of spending money on controlling the pollution will be decreased drastically. So, governments can invest these huge amounts of income on extending the public transportation systems which are its benefit is not only for the people who do not have cars, but
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 whole society is the beneficiary since everyone can get wherever they want in the least time and without out the stress of driving due to there is no traffic for public transportation like subways.
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, the main advantage is helping the Earth and the environment which is a great attempt to maintain the green world. Absolutely, every rose has its thorns. By increasing the levy, it would be a concern about the quality of people’s life. So, if a government would like to enforce a law, it should be aware of the poverty that it can make because a rich group of a society will pay the price. Even though, it has a sharp rising rate.
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 situation others cannot afford it and the social gap will be considerable.
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 economic crisis often deteriorates into social unrest. So rising rate should be based on a wise intelligent.
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, expense should be more for people who whether owning luxury cars or more than one car. All in one, all attends to developing the public transportation should be appreciated through pollution, which is a worldwide danger over decades.
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, to decrease the traffic jam regard to saving precious time of humankind.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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