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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#college #students #home #parents
IT IS SAID BY SOME PEOPLE THAT, THAT IT IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN WHO STUDY IN COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES TO NOT LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS, BUT LIVE FAR AWAY FROM THEM. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, THE BEST OPTION FOR STUDENTS IS TO STAY WITH THEIR
PARENTS BECAUSE
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PARENTS, BECAUSE
 THEY WILL NOT FACE MANY PROBLEMS WHEN THEY HAVE A LOT OF STUDY TO DO.
TO BEGIN
 WITH, IT IS THE BEST OPTIONS FOR SIBLINGS TO LIVE WITH THEIR PARENTS AS IT HELPS THEM FROM FACING SOME BIGGEST PROBLEMS. THESE TROUBLES COULB BE RELATED TO WORKLOAD AT HOME AS WELL AS AT OF SCHOOL.
IN OTHER WORDS
, THEY ALREADY HAVE A LOT OF PRESSURE OF HIGH STUDIES OR EXAM PREPARATION WHICH MAKE THEM FEEL EXHAUSTED. SO, LIING WITH THEIR PARENTS CAN HELP THEM TO NOT TO DO WORK
ALSO
 AT HOME.
MOREOVER
, EARNING IS THE BIGGEST TROUBLE FOR THEM IF THEY STAY ALONE, BUT IF THEY WILL LIVE TOGHETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS, IT COULD BE SOLVED AS THEIR PARENTS MANAGE TO DO IT.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, THERE ARE FEW BEST WAYS FOR TEENAGERS TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM THEIR PARENTS.
FIRSTLY
, THEY WILL BECOME INDEPENDENT.
SECOND
, THEY WILL BECOME AWARE OF THEIR RESPONSIBILITIES LIKE WASHING CLOTHES, PREPARING FOOD FOR THEMSELVES OR SHOPPING. IN
THIS
 WAY, THEY WILL BECOME MORE RESPONSIBLE OF THEIR DUTIES WHICH WILL HELP THEM IN THE FUTURE FOR NOT STRUGGLING. I BELIVE, THEY ALREADY MATURE TO HANDLE ANY KIND OF SITUATION. IN CONCLUSION, I THINK, WHILE, THERE ARE SOME GOOD OPTIONS FOR STUDENTS TO STAY WITH THEIR PARENTS BUT, THE BEST WAY IS TO LIVE WITH THEM, WHICH HELP THEM TO SOLVESOME BIGGEST PROBLEMS DURING THEIR STUDY OF HIGHER COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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