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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

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The rain degradations have been rapidly raised and make a serious issue of clean water. The climate damaged by people due to the discharging of chemical waste into the rivers, lakes, and seas. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the remedial measures and side effects of dirty liquor on the communities and wildlife. On the one hand, there are two major reasons why people are afraid of environment contamination because people acquire more money so that they damaging the surroundings by dumped toxic waste into the rivers and that rain drinks by economically deprive people.
As a result
, refreshment ailments have been ascended. The
second
 reason for
this
 is that the vehicles spew obnoxious gases into the atmosphere and its deleterious to shift the ecosystem and ozone layer depletion,
hence
, the inner system gets damaged by not getting fresh air into the surrounding and sun rays deleterious for skin cancers.
On the other hand
, it is counterclaimed that, it is the fact that, there are many beasts, endangered due to drinking hazardous liquor, which affects the inner immune system and raised the ailments. Since, the chemicals dumped into the rivers, folks are more associated with health problems, and
also
 its risk to aquatic heart.
Further
 and even more, not only the sip pollution jeopardized soul, but
also
 of the environment is harmful to society. By way of conclusion, earning is not only revolutionizing the growth of living, so we all have taken steps to save the earth by reducing discharging squander into the refreshment sources.
On the other hand
, it is counterclaimed that, it is the fact that, there are many beasts, endangered due to drinking hazardous cup, which affects the inner immune system and raised the ailments. Since, the chemicals dumped into the rivers, folks are more associated with health problems, and
also
 its risk to aquatic soul.
Further
 and even more, not only the rain ,po
ll
Accept space
,
ution jeopardized activity, but
also
 of the environment is harmful to society.
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