Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

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Children with the growth less dependance from parents, so their relationships change and frequently in mature ages become weaker than before. Overall, from my perspective, parents play a main role throughout
entire life
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the entire life
of the each person.
Firstly
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, few people can deny the fact that parents
have been teaching
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have taught
us all the
time
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because ages for them
have no
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have, no
matter: it
is means
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means
is meant
children for parents always children, so they always want
give
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to give
advice and take care about their son or
doughter
a female human offspring
daughter
.
For example
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, each
people
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person
eventually has situation when return to home, and inside they always know that parents provide for them peaceful place and help in all their
effort
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efforts
.
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, parents play role teacher, and shelter that crucial in our turbulent times;
consequently
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, relationship with them should be the same all the
time
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.
Although
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,
time
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to
time
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parents attempt
take
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to take
control of
children
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children's
lives that deprive them right of choice and lead to controversial aftermath.
For example
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, parents of rich families impose their lifestyle, business and even marriage on profitable partner. As
result
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a result
, children begin resisting to
such
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control and in all effort they attempt
break
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to break
off relationship with their
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off their relationship with
parents.
Likewise
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, if parents control each
steps
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step
children or even force to fall in line, it
is leads
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leads
has led
is led
to rebel in various
form
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forms
and mental disease.
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, parents should
remeber
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remember
that their child is people too with own view and life, thereby should give children freedom in mature
ages
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age
. To conclude, I think parents have
crucial role
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a crucial role
in our life;
however
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, for
vital relationship
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a vital relationship
their
influense
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
should, with the years, have been diminishing.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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