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Some people believe that printed books will be entiring replaced by the Internet. Do you believe that this is true?

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With the advent of the
internet
, many books have been published in digital format on various sites.
As a result
, some people reduced the use of printed
book
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books
, referring to the fact that digital books are more convenient;
therefore
, many people questioned whether physical books will be driven out by the
internet
.
having
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Having
 said that, I strongly believe that printed books will always be in demand. In
this
 essay I will explain the reasons why I think so.
Firstly
, there will be people who willing to read real books
instead
 of electronic. These people consider reading not only as a
process but
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process, but
also
 as art.
For instance
, collectors buying expensive books for extending collection, which brings them gratification. It is worth mentioning that many bookworms love the brand-name scent of old books and the library that stimulates their motivation to read.
therefore
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Therefore
, the possession of physical copies is vital for many.
Secondly
, electronic books may harm our health.
From
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For
 scientific perspective, the light from the screen of the smartphone emits radiation, which damages the vision.
In addition
, another pivotal reason is that the
internet
 may disappear due to global catastrophe. Thereby, information, including books will be destroyed.
However
, physical books will still exist, which in turn will help
humanity not
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humanity, not
 to forget all the knowledge that has accumulated over the centuries and to continue the normal functioning of society. To conclude, I believe that books after decades will remain a significant part of people’s life. The
internet
 will not be able to fully replace printed books.

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