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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The population
on
Suggestion
of
 the earth is not keeping pace with the amount of
food
 produced, resulting in a worldwide
food
 shortage. Under
such
 circumstances, it is thought by some that using
gentically
by genetic mechanisms
genetically
 modified
food
 can resolve the crisis. I concur
by
Suggestion
with
this
 as
gentically
by genetic mechanisms
genetically
 modified
food
 offer more yield at a cheaper cost and in adverse climatic conditions.
Firstly
, the population of humans is increasing at an exponential rate leading to deforestation and more arid regions, and
consequently
 leaving less idle farming land and lower
food
 production to feed more mouths globally.
For instance
, WHO has predicted that 70% more
food
 would need to be produced by 2050 to alleviate hunger problems.
Gentically
Suggestion
Genetically
 modified
food
 are able to survive harsh weather
such
 as heat and less moist soil and
in addition
, more
resitant
relating to or conferring immunity (to disease or infection)
resistant
 to bacteria and fungi,
thus
 having
significantly higher crop yield
Suggestion
a significantly higher crop yield
. There are many people who feel that
food
 shouldn't be tampered with and they refuse to consume these.
However
,
food
 manufactured using
such
 process is often cheaper and
therefore
, affordable to the masses.
Also
, its nutritional values as well as shelf life can be elevated. Many people are not able to have access to
food
 due to poverty or are suffering from malnutrition.
This
 is evident from the fact that 56% of Africa's
popultaion
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
 are
food
 deprived as they cannot afford it, leading to
malnutition
a state of poor nutrition; can result from insufficient or excessive or unbalanced diet or from inability to absorb foods
malnutrition
 in around 64% of the children.
Laboratoy
Suggestion
Laboratory
 produced
food
 can aid the poor in having access to healthy
food
 which is full of nourishment. To recapitulate, to combat starvation and the environmental problems resulting in less farmable land,
genitically
by genetic mechanisms
genetically
 modified
food
 can assist by producing more crops under
same conditions
Suggestion
the same conditions
. It can
also
 succour the destitute by providing nutrition rich
food
 at a lower cost.

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