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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some people still believe that men and women are born with different qualities which determine what jobs are open to them. While there were strong arguments to justify
this
 view in the past, I completely disagree that it should apply to the world of
work
 today. On the one hand, it used to be thought that men and women have some distinct characteristics which affect the range of jobs open to them and which traditionally affect their choice of career. In terms of physical strength, when most
work
 was still performed manually, it was argued that women were simply not strong enough to
work
 on construction sites or drive heavy trucks. They were
also
 believed to be unsuited to dangerous jobs, so few women entered the army. In terms of traditional stereotypes, women were considered to be more caring and sensitive than men, so they tended to enter professions
such
 as nursing or the care of children and the elderly.
On the other hand
, the workplace has changed dramatically, and I believe that there is no room for outdated attitudes towards the capabilities of men and women. Men and women should enjoy equal opportunities in all careers.
Firstly
, changes in education have given women the same chance to gain qualifications as men. If they
work
 hard, they deserve the opportunity to reach the top in their chosen field.
Secondly
, a more modern outlook has broken the traditional barriers, which
effectively
Suggestion
Effectively
 prevented men and women from doing certain jobs in the past: construction workers, truck drivers or soldiers in the case of women; nursing, cooking and cleaning jobs in the case of men. In conclusion, I would argue that there is no room today for sex discrimination at
work
 – either against women or against men.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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