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Many people believe that the priority of the government should be to ensure growing economy. While others believe that the government should focus its effort on uplifting the less fortunate? discuss both views

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Major sections
A Major section
The Major section
 of society
believe
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believes
 that the thrift of the money is one of the major aspects of development in any
country
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.
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,
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government
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the government
 should be spending more on the development of the
economy
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 to make a better
country
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. While some people
believes
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believe
 that the leaders of our
country
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 should spend more on the
underprevileged
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
 people so the standard of living is
uplifited
exalted emotionally especially with pride
uplifted
 for the people below
poverty line
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the poverty line
. In
this
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 essay, I will share my opinion, considering views from both sides with relevant examples. On one hand, the
country
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’s
economy
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 grows with better infrastructure, tourism and hygiene so the
government
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 should be
focussing
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focusing
 more on that.
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, more and more foreigners are visiting
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country
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a country
countries
the country
 like
India which
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India, which
 increases the revenue of the
country
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 and boost our
economy
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 as well.
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, hill stations are popular among the people from other parts of the world. As they go over there for meditation and yoga which are very popular activities for them. On
other hand
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the other hand
, boosting
economy
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parallely
being everywhere equidistant and not intersecting
parallel
parallels
 can
also
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 be done by helping the
poor people our
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poor people in our
country
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 who are struggling
from
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for
 their basic survival.
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,
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government
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the government
 should start spending more on the basic necessities and create more job opportunities for people so the poverty in the
country
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 decreases, which can
also
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 help a
country
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 to develop at
rapid pace
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a rapid pace
.
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, introducing
government
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 plans of creating more job opportunities, benefits to the needy people of the society. To conclude, I think that developing
country
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 can be done by reducing the poverty in our
country
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. As
this
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 will help them to manage their family basic needs and have a healthy life.
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Moreover
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Moreover, this
this
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 will make a
country
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 a happier
country
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 in terms of living.

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