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Some people believe that robots are important for humans to develop their future, while others think that it is a dangerous invention that will impact society negatively. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today's generation is changing at a very fast pace. The way it moves, people are driven more and more by technological materials. As
science
 and technology are getting an advance, the scientist coming up with new inventions and discoveries. Now a
day
 these inventions and development plays an essential role in
day
 to
day
life
 operations.
For instance
, household appliances, mobile handset so on.
Similarly
, the invention, like robots and machineries plays an essential part in today's
life
. Especially in the field of medical. The medical
science
 is so advanced that many patients are treated through robots. Robots have played vital role in human's
life
, whether it's about saving a time or in the aspect of convenience. It has made
life
 so easy that people are facing less difficulties.
Although
 it has many negative impacts on society. When it comes to people's lifestyle, individuals are more depending on these technologies which resulting in health problems, people are becoming lazy and ignorant
,
Accept space
,
 affecting child's mind
for example
 children are getting addicted to online games
so on
in the near future
soon
. Robots are the proof and possibility of
science
 fictions. It shows that how
science
 and technology has come so far.
Although
 it has many disadvantages as well. If the scientists developed and invent like
this
then
 that
day
 is not far when humans will depend only on
technologytechnology
Suggestion
technology technology
 only. To conclude, in my opinion Despite of all advantages, if
science
 and technology will get an advance and developed like present world
then
 it could outweigh its positive aspects and could lead to dangerous impact.
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