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Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many individuals believe that building houses is not as important as planting
trees
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 in open
landscape
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landscapes
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 in cities and towns. I strongly agree with the following statement because
,
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 it is useful for
people
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’s well-being.
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 to that, it
also
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 helps in tackling the grave problem of global warming. Planting
trees
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 in big cities and towns makes a soothing environment for
people
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 to jog and walk.
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 leads to motivating
people
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 to maintain their physical health. Elderly
people
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 or
retiered
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retired
people
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 can have open spaces filled with greenery for yoga and asana,
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 helps them maintain an individual’s mental
well being
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well-being
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.
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, a great number of elderly
people
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 and middle-aged
people
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 are seen in parks doing yoga, jogging, and exercise.
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 to that, planting
trees
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also
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 helps in solving the problem of global warming and
make
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an
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a
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 more suitable environment for future
generation
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generations
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.
Trees
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 are the only source of oxygen,
it
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which
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 increases the gas exchange from carbon dioxide to oxygen.
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 leads to a decrease in
overall
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 carbon dioxide and helps in protecting the ozone layer.
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, it is
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 believed that planting more
trees
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 leads to more rain.
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, the region with a larger number of
trees
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are
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is
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 observed to have less ozone layer depletion. In conclusion, I strongly agree that planting
trees
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 in open spaces is more important than building houses because it helps in maintaining
physical
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the physical
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 and mental well-being of an individual and it
also
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 helps to tackle the world problem of global warming.

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task achievement
Expand on your ideas by providing more detailed explanations or additional examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your sentences flow smoothly and logically from one to the next, possibly by using more linking words or phrases.
task achievement
You have a clear position on the topic and provide solid reasons that support your viewpoint.
task achievement
Your use of examples, particularly regarding the benefits of parks for elderly individuals, adds depth to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban forestry
  • biodiversity
  • recreational areas
  • sustainable development
  • afforestation
  • carbon sequestration
  • photosynthesis
  • green infrastructure
  • heat island effect
  • property values
  • eco-friendly
  • mixed-use development
  • vertical gardens
  • rooftop parks
  • land-use planning
  • renewable resources
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