The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australias share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The provided bar
garph
Correct your spelling
graph
graphs
illustrate
the number of Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
japanese
travellers who visited foreign countries from 1985 to 1995, Change the capitalization
Japanese
whereas
the line graph gives information on the market share
of australia
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Australia
on
japan's tourism sector.
It can be seen that in 1985, about 5 million people from japan travelled abroad, Change preposition
in
whereas
in
the end in 1995. the figure Change the preposition
at
triple
and Wrong verb form
tripled
it
Change the pronoun
its
reach
Change the verb form
reaches
to
15 million. During Change preposition
apply
this
period of japanese
travelling Change the capitalization
Japanese
trend
number slightly reduced but after Correct article usage
the trend
that
Add a comma
,that
a
increase was observed Change the article
an
untill
1995.
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until
On the other hand
, in 1985 australias
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Australian
share
remained at 2 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
japanese
Change the capitalization
Japanese
tourist
. Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
Whereas
a
Change the article
an
increse
was observed Correct your spelling
increase
untill
1988. Correct your spelling
until
Correct your spelling
however
owever
, in 1989 Correct your spelling
However
this
percentage reduced slightly after
that again Correct word choice
and after
incresement
in Correct your spelling
increment
share
was observed and this
trend goes till 1993 and that
time Change preposition
at that
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Australias
australias
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Australia
share
was beyond 6 percent
and in the Change the spelling
per cent
last
it will Add a comma
,last
became
equal to 6 in 1994
In conclusion, Change the verb form
become
japanese
Change the capitalization
Japanese
tourist
travelled abroad and in Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
same
decade Correct article usage
the same
australias
Change the capitalization
Australias
share
of japanese
Change the capitalization
Japanese
tourist
they both are increased.Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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