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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Travelling and
tourism
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withing
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 the countries has many advantages for certain areas.
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, there should be a consideration on how it
impact
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impacts
 on the lifestyle of
native people
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the native people
 and
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
. In my opinion, I believe that advantages are higher than disadvantages of
this
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 consideration.
This
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 essay will discuss both good hand and
the bad
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the worst
 hand of international
tourism
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. Travelling within countries has its own advantages.
Glaobal
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Global
tourism
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 creates lots of job opportunities.
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, most of the careers related to airport and services, hotels and accommodation, tour guiding depends on international
tourism
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 rather than internal or local
tourism
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. Global
tourism
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 allows people to see the beauty of the world. Visiting interesting, world famous places
has provided
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have provided
 the opportunity to global to
vitness
be a witness to
witness
 the beauty of mother nature and to love it. There are many other reasons why we could call international
tourism
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 is beneficial to many places.
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, there are some drawbacks of the global
tourism
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. Lifestyle, culture, traditions, of local inhabitants will surely
affected
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affect
 by the foreigners.
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,
most if
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most, if
 the countries which had a proud history and culture has now become westernized. Due to
immatured
characteristic of a lack of maturity
immature
 acts of the travellers some of the beautiful places have lost its glory.
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, some parts of the natural rainforests are not authorized to enter to ordinary people to
vist
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visit
 because of careless activities done by the travellers.
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,
although
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 there are some disadvantages created by the global
tourism
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, there are a large number of advantages,
benifits
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the benefits
benefits
 that have created by the international
tourism
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for
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in
 many countries like providing financial stability for people who are working in the
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
fields
filed
 of
tourism
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.
With
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By
 having proper rules and regulations, concerns
for
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of
 local people could be controlled. So that I believe that international
tourism
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 has greater advantages than the disadvantages.
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