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There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions?

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The need of the pure, fresh
water
 is becoming increasing daily and it has become a world-wide threat.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for that and possible solutions. There are several major reasons for
this
 problem. The demand for fresh
water
 is increasing due to lack of supply or availability of fresh
water
, which is caused by the drying out of fresh
water
 springs. Mainly deforestation is the reason for drying out of those springs. Trees are adding a great value preserving the Eco balance of the environment. As the
second
 reason we can say
water
 pollution in fresh
water
 springs. Because of many activities done by the human, the
water
 in rivers, streams get polluted. Those polluted
water
Suggestion
waters
 get mixed with fresh
water
 and generates spoiled
water
.
For example
,
water
 taken from wells in urban areas cannot be used immediately. It should be gone through a process of neutralizing the bacteria. In order to overcome
this
 problem I can suggest some solutions.
First
Suggestion
The first
 and the best solution is, to preserve trees, jungles and protect the Eco balance in the environment. Specially the natural rainforests are the sources of the fresh
water
 springs. So we have to grow them not to chop them down. As a
second
 solution we have to eliminate polluted
water
 mixing with fresh
water
. We must not put polluted
water
 directly into the streams or rivers. We have to make rules and regulations for industries, when they are dumping used
water
 into
water
 sources.
Finally
, To overcome the problem of increasing the need of fresh
water
, we need to stop deforestation, pollution of
water
 sources to enhance the
water
 supply from fresh
water
 springs.
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