Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interactions today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smartphones
plays a vital role in our life. Despite having so many advantages of
smartphones
some people think that
smartphones
are spoiling social relations among people. I disagree with
this
topic completely and
this
essay will
discribe
give a description of
describe
why
this
stance has been taken
To begin
with,
smartphones
are invented for good cause, now people can talk with their dear ones face to face. These mobile devices have connected the whole world with the help of internet.
Moreover
, mobile phones have changed the way people used to remain in touch with each other.
For example
, two decades ago people who used to live far from their family had no
opition
the right to buy or sell property at an agreed price; the right is purchased and if it is not exercised by a stated date the money is forfeited
option
to contact each other apart from postal mail and that service used to take almost one month to deliver. But now with the help of mobile phones it takes only five seconds to deliver the message to the other side.
On the other hand
, there are some reasons of why some people believe that mobile phones are destroying social interactions and the most pivotal reason is, people are now addicted of
smartphones
.
Thet
Suggestion
They
spend long hours on social media and entertainment applications on mobile phones. To exemplify,
few years
Suggestion
a few years
ago all family members used to watch television
together but
Accept comma addition
together, but
now every member of
family
Suggestion
the family
a family
is engaged in mobile phones. In fact, these devices have destroyed social relations
.
Accept space
.
To conclude, technology like mobile phones have lots of advantages.
However
, it should use in
proper way
Suggestion
a proper way
without destroying social relations.
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