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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interactions today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #smartphones #interactions
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Smartphones
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 plays a vital role in our life. Despite having so many advantages of
smartphones
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 some people think that
smartphones
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 are spoiling social relations among people. I disagree with
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 topic completely and
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give a description of
describe
 why
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 stance has been taken
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smartphones
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 are invented for good cause, now people can talk with their dear ones face to face. These mobile devices have connected the whole world with the help of internet.
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, mobile phones have changed the way people used to remain in touch with each other.
For example
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, two decades ago people who used to live far from their family had no
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the right to buy or sell property at an agreed price; the right is purchased and if it is not exercised by a stated date the money is forfeited
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 to contact each other apart from postal mail and that service used to take almost one month to deliver. But now with the help of mobile phones it takes only five seconds to deliver the message to the other side.
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, there are some reasons of why some people believe that mobile phones are destroying social interactions and the most pivotal reason is, people are now addicted of
smartphones
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.
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They
 spend long hours on social media and entertainment applications on mobile phones. To exemplify,
few years
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a few years
 ago all family members used to watch television
together but
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together, but
 now every member of
family
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the family
a family
 is engaged in mobile phones. In fact, these devices have destroyed social relations
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 To conclude, technology like mobile phones have lots of advantages.
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, it should use in
proper way
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a proper way
 without destroying social relations.
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