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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest way that government and individual can tackle this problem.

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Overpopulation
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 every environment and economical problem. Nowadays, in metro city's high
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population creating
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population, creating
 various issues which affect society and the environment. In my opinion, poverty and pollution are their major issues which arise due to
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 and government should implement certain steps to have
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 of it. Irrefutably,
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 arises due to many factors
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 as illiteracy, lack of education, depletion of various resources. In metro cities, highly populated areas cause high pollution. Due to highly populated cities, people prefer to use vehicles and many other sources which unconditionally affect the health of people and the environment.
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, the
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 major factor to rise in the number of
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 is poverty. Due to poverty, many individuals can't get an adequate level of education.
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, leads to high increase in populace growth rate.
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: I personally experienced it when I ask a labourer that why he had 4 kids? His reply led me in shock. He said that the more hand, the more they can earn money.
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, government should take initiative steps to tackle against
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 critical issue. The government should launch campaigns in which is awareness is promoted against
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. Strict law should be implemented to
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 the growth rate.
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: our neighbourhood nation China takes strict steps to
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population
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. As per the report, in 2030 China will become the 2nd populated country
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 of 1st. In conclusion,
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 is a critical issue of our nation.
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 issue can lead to many factors and we all need to take adequate steps to
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 the growth rate of
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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