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Women should have an equal role alongside men in both police and armed forces. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#women #role #men #police #forces
This
 information about female must be equal significantly the same as male in some occupations
such
 as
police
 and military.Some people think that women
can not
can not
cannot
 be a member of
police
Suggestion
the police
 or they are not corresponded to armed forces
,
Accept space
,
but female declaim
this
 opinion and they think women and men must be given equal possibility. On the one hand
,
Accept space
,
if women can be a soldier any time it is perilous for them and female
can not
can not
cannot
 keep herself in
dengerous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
 situations as men.So
,
Accept space
,
women
can not
can not
cannot
 be strong and durable for danger as men.Female have more chances to be
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 professions.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
 of time and situations
such
 as being a soldier or becoming a
police
 officer men ignore for women
,
Accept space
,
however
 female disagree
this
 idea.So
,
Accept space
,
in their opinion women can be as men in any
dengerous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
 situations and they are detailed strong and powerful as men.So
,
Accept space
,
male and female have to equal chance any profession or
situatin
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
there are plus and minus sides
,
Accept space
,
but if
women
Suggestion
the women
 agree to be a soldier or
police
 officer they can be
master
Suggestion
mastered
 both of
this
plural of "this"
these
 professions.In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
male and female
mest
be compelled, be necessary, have to, ought to
must
 be equal opportunity in every time.

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