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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009
#aid #form #six #countries
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provide
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provides
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 information about six developed countries
supplied
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that supplied
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 aid to developing nation between 2008 and 2010.
Unit
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 measured in billions of dollars.
Overall
,
US
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the US
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 contributed
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
money
 for
developing
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development
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However
, the aid of most countries fluctuated
in
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over
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 three years. Germany was only
constant
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follow
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following
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upward
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an upward
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trand
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trend
. It can be clearly observed that over the 20
billion
money
w2as
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was
 given by
US
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the US
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 in 2008.it was shlity
deacreased
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decreased
exactly
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by exactly
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 20
billion
 in 2009.it increased to
maximum
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a maximum
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 amount
25
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of 25
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billion
 in 2010in contrast,the least proportion of
money
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the money
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 was given by
netherland
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the netherland
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 and Sweden which was almost
similarly
 fluctuated(just less
then
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than
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 $10
billion
) in all given year. 10
billion
money
was help
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germany
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Germany
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 in 2008 it
continuasly
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continuously
continually
want
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went
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 up $14 to $15
billion
 and
reah
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reached
second
 highest in 2010.
however
,
UK
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the UK
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 stood
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a significient
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significient
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significant
 amount
12
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of 12
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billion
dollar
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dollars
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 which was as same as japan in 2008 UK plummeted to approximately $10
billion
 in 2009
likewise
japan
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Japan
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 declined to exactly 10
billion
dollar
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dollars
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.
Moreover
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 UK and japan rose to
12billion
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12 billion
 and 11
billion
dollar
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dollars
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respectively
respectivly
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respectively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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