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TOPIC-Some people it is waste of time when plan for future it is more important to focus on present .do you agree or disagree .

#topic-some #people #waste #time #plan #future #focus
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In today pace of people are wasting much
time
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 in preparing for
future
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 rather than thinking about present
time
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.
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 I agree to
this
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 statement
.
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 My justification is explained
further
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. There are several
argument
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arguments
 which favour my agreement live in
present moment
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the present moment
 is more beneficial than plan for
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future
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the future
.
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 I think people should focus on
present
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the present
presents
 because
present action
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the present action
 always impact on
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future
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the future
.
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.
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Moreover there
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Moreover, there
 are many reasons why people are very insecure for
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future
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the future, such
the future such
such
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 as stiff competition in each and every field
.
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 One universal fact is when
person
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a person
people
the person
miss
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misses
 present
time
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 it will not come back so it is better to live in present and enjoy leisure
time
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 with kith and kin
.
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 Today people have been suffering from
burning issue
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the burning issue
 of less free
time
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 due to more society pressure and increase ambition about materialistic thinking
.
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 I believe that people should balance between work and social activity
time
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.
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In addition
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 to
this
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 in present many parents have pressurised for
child
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the child
children
a child
 to fill their desire due to students are more
time
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 spending for study and other activity so they missed to enjoy present
time
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 for
achieve
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achieving
dream
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dreams
.
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.
On the other hand
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,
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,
 there are some people who counter claim the statement the most
point
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points
 they think is only enjoy
in
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at
 present it will be
destroying
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destroyed
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future
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the future
. They think people should think about present
time
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 so
future
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 will become amazing and successful
.
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 It can
finally
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 the concluded that
although
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 there are a few questions against focus on
present
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the present
.
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 My argument
prove
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proves
 that my agreement logically acceptable
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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