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Some people say that music is a good way of ringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Tomorrowland, one of the most well-known electronic dance
music
 festival in the world, sold approximately 5000 tickets for almost every event in all around the world. The event
gather
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gathers
has gathered
 people from different countries in a single stadium, with people speaking different languages. Whether
music
 has the ability to bring people with different cultural backgrounds and ages together has been a hot topic to argue.
This
 essay is going to talk about the reasons why
music
 can be and cannot be a way of gathering people together, and
furthermore
 to give my opinion. It is no doubt that
music
 is powerful and magical, as it has the mysterious energy to make us dance and move, or to make us cry and feel vulnerable. For some, if not many, of the songs in the world have no lyrics. It is simply composed of notes and rhythms, and
that is
 it. Even though you do not speak the same language as the writer of the song, you could still feel the same feeling as the writer feels.
Therefore
,
music
 could be a great way for
music
 enthusiasts to connect with one another.
On the other hand
, for people that do not hold the same interest in that specific genre of
music
,
music
 might not be able to gather individuals effectively. One of
the fine
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the finest
 example could be that a person who loves heavy metal
music
 might not be able to connect with people who has a deep love in classical
music
.
This
 can be explained by the personal interests that each individual holds, as simple as it sounds, people love to share the common experience with each other.
Inspite
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In spite
 of the fact that people with the same interest could be connected with
music
, physical barriers
such
 as language and physical disorders associated with
old
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older
 ages, could be a big gap to hold them back. Even though pure
music
 can link up people,
however
,
music
 with lyrics still
require
Suggestion
requires
 people to hold a common language in order to be able to understand.
Also
, it is still impossible for elderly who are physically incompetent to gather around. To sum up,
music
do have
Suggestion
does have
 the ability of bringing people with different cultures and ages together, but it could only happen in specific circumstances. For
music
 that lyrics are included, it is still impossible to hold people all together. Let not underestimate what
music
 can do, it might still be possible to gather people all together in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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