The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to bei g overweight is increasing What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

It is a worldwide issue that, especially in these days, the overwhelmingly rising numbers of people are suffering from several health issues and diseases resulting from obesity. And
this by
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this, by
the way alerts governments to immediately take action against
this
issue. In
this
essay I will try to give some more information about potential causes and suggest some relevant solutions
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First
of all, it is vital to emphasize that, nowadays more and more people are adding some kinds of harmful fast food and snacks into their diet. As a consequence the level of
colesterine
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
in their blood is likely to grow by the way narrowing blood vessels and raising its pressure.
Therefore
, they are at risk of suffering from numerous problems with circulatory
system including
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system, including
heart attack and multiple sclerosis. With the aim of addressing
this
matter government leaders should work more on raising taxes on junk food and giving detailed information in
this
field in order to increase public awareness A
second
problem lies
on
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in
with
people
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the people
themselves. What I mean by
this
is that, thanks to the rapidly developing modern
technogy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
citizens are now allowed to move less as the significant proportion of their work is done by several gadgets and robotics.
Hence
, the amount of calories taken through the consumption of food
outweights
be heavier than
outweighs
the sum which is burned
in
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during
daily activities. The solution is for the government to arrange some sport facilities and encourage inhabitants to exercise on a daily basis. To take all the information which was given above into consideration, it seems
really vulnerable issue
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a really vulnerable issue
that a number of people with several illnesses caused by extra weight is constantly piling up. So it is a case in which some extra effort is needed
feom
a giver or sender
from
the government leaders and the population itself.
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