Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Punishing children in educational institutes is the matter of debate nowadays. Some people argue that rewards
instead
of
punishment
will help more in the world of academia while others believe that
fear
of
punishment
is
necessery
absolutely essential
necessary
for better grades. I
,
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personally, believe that giving
punishment
could never be a solution for learning difficulties. It is easy to comprehend, why I am not in favour of giving
punishment
to
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for
young adults by the following reasons. The preponderant is that young minds are very sensitive and
fear
of
punishment
may take them away from studies forever as they would not try because of
fear
of failure
,
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,
and
then
scolded or physically punished by their teacher.Apart from
this
,
excess
the right to enter
access
restrictions or punishments may send them into trauma
;
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;
as a result
, they would lag behind in holistic development as well as hinder creativity and inner talents.
Thus
, punishments not only harm children
physically but
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physically, but
also
mentally.
Secondly
,
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If rewards and appreciation is given to the
childern
a young person of either sex
children
, it might motivate them to do better
further
.
For example
, if a pupil is performing
poor
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poorly
in mathematic
,
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,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
instead
of scolding him for his slow learning, teacher should acquire
different methodlogy
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a different methodology
different methodology
different methodologies
and appreciate his little efforts
.
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.
By doing
this
, an instructor can encourage his student to perform better and a child will be no longer run from the difficult subjects like Mathematics
.
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.
At the same time
,
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,
rewards and prizes
helps
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help
to make young
ones
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one
inquistive
showing curiosity
inquisitive
learner as in the greed of
prize
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the prize
they will ultimately do their best. In short, motivation is the key of learning and it could bring in students by giving them rewards only no matter how small it is.
On the contrary
of
this
, people who are in
favor
promote over another
favour
of punishments believe that it will help children to remain focussed on studies because
by
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of
the pressure of teachers and
fear
of being punished enables them to score well in exams.If there
is
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are
no
such
restrictions they will not take studies seriously. Apart from
this
, free learners sometimes create other behaviour problems
.
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.
For example
, a
studies
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study
shows that after banning the physical
punishment
in schools
,
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,
cases of miss behaviour and
jouvinile
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juvenile
criminals raises dramatically.
Hence
, to guide children on right path sometimes physical
punishment
becomes
mandatery
required by rule
mandatory
. In conclusion,
although
punishing children may
asist
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
assists
them to get good marks under pressure, it could never be helpful for
long lasting memory
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a long lasting memory
long lasting memories
. According to my opinion, encouragement and motivation
is
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are
the only key to success in learning
wheather
introduces two alternatives
whether
it is in
form
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the form
of prizes or verbal appreciation.
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