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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that it is wiser for children to spend their leisure time on reading books,
instead
 of spending time on watching television or playing games ,
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debated
opic nowadays. In my point of view, I totally agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, reading books br
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bring
 significant amount of benefits which effect for the imagination and education of the kids.
To begin
 with, when children read the stories they need to
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 the characters, scenery and even the sound in that story. When they have to think and
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 their brain will be more creative.
For example
, when they read the Harry Potter novels, they need to
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 the appearance of all characters and many details which ar
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have appeared
appear
n the stories. The imagination he
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helps
he stories more interesting and for the kids' reading.
Besides
, reading stories is
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are
 good way to broaden the kids' knowledge in my fields, so they might be better in some subjects at school, especially the literature.
On the other hand
, watching TV provides the children the instant picture and imaginations without thinking too much.
Initially
, providing the lively characters and picture will be easy for a child to remember as quickly as possible, so it will lead to the children will be lazier to
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 and reduce their creativity.
Moreover
, playing computer games is a good tool to entertain the children after the studying hours, but if they play games to
m
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
uch it will cause the obesity and myopia and lack of socializing skill. To sum up,
although
 watching television or playing games is a good ways to entertain, the children would be increased and encouraged in reading stories due to all its effective benefits.

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