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Nowadays, many people have to work longer time,and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

Strain and anxiety are common in
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workplace
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the workplace
workplaces
. Several workers have to perform duties longer than usual
hours which
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hours, which
 increase
stress
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 than
past
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the past
. There are mainly because of high
competition
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to
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for
 finding
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job
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jobs
 and globalization. There are
number
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a number
 of solutions
from
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for
 employers to improve the
work
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 environment of an employee. High
competition
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 in
job
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market
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 one of the reasons why jobs have become more stressful nowadays. Employers always have authority to recruit
new employee
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new employees
a new employee
 to replace someone and
this
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 why someone has to
work
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 longer hours and attain their performance target in order to save their
job
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.
This
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naturally
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natural
 negative psychological effect causes
stress
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 and anxiety. Increasing
competition
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 in
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market
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the market
 due to globalization is
also
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 another reason for causing strain. Every small and medium business entity and companies in developing nations has to compete with Multinational companies. So, they lease their plenty of time in
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workplace
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the workplace
 to meet the demand from the
market
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.
As a result
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, they cannot spend their precious time with their loved once and
family which
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family, which
 reflects mental
stress
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 and other health issues.
However
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, higher
competition
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 in business, employers should ensure
healthy environment
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a healthy environment
 and support their workers morally and financially in order to sustain long run. An organization cannot run without experience and dedicated employees and constant fear of uncertainties cannot signal healthy
workplace
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. Employers always have to encourage their workers to
work
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 the regular hours and over time when
it
it is
it's
 absolutely necessary. They always have to pay rewards and prizes when they achieve their target which leads friendly environment and
also
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 expect to
work
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 more with
dedication
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a dedication
 that benefit to employers for higher productivity and huge demand. What is more, if
worker
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a worker
the worker
feel
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feels
 sick or any personal problems
such
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 as illness in family and relationship breakup, employers always have to take sympathy approach and guide and support them. In conclusion, High
competition
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 in
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job
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the job market
market
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 and globalization are the main reasons for cause
stress
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 and anxiety in
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workplace
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the workplace
. Employers have to lot of
contribute
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contributing
 to improving
such
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 phenomena. A healthy
workplace
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 is the crucial solution to tackle down
this
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 issue.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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