The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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would like to open few important points, When we were in our schooling, usually we don't care that much
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current hesitation of smartphone wasn't there, we used to play more physical games than sitting 2 to 3 hours in raw playing mobile phones or video games. But coming to current
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in course curriculum,
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into course won't help as the time passes students leaves their schools and joins
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joins organisations to make their professional career. At these places work usually tend to be more hectic and stressful and
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we require exercise and yoga kind of things. Our health ministry can make these mandatory for the any organization working full time or less to conduct
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exercises on
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a regular basis
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