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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It’s considered by some that
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satisfaction
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 is more important than the
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 a
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 can offer, while others think that the permanence of a
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 is more important because amusement is not always possible to achieve. In my opinion, I believe that being satisfied with the
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 is the most essential thing, no matter whether the
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 length is or its requirements. On one hand, there’s a lot of people who think that their
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 has to provide them a sense of
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 and happiness rather than only
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. A good example of these are those jobs where the people who works at have a passion for it so they don’t really mind any other aspect of the
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 how much are they gonna
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 at it or even the money they are going to earn. They enjoy the
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 as long as they can
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 on it.
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,
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, for some people having a permanent
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 is more important
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 of doing a
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 where they can really be satisfied.
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, because for most of the people
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 is only a way to have an income in order to be able to eat and live they feel more secure when they are working in a
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 they know they are going to stay at forever.
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, in my opinion, I think that whether people
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 on a permanent
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 or a non-permanent one,
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 is the most vital think a person have to have in order to
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 properly. People who are happy with their
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 tend to
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 much better and are more effective than those who are in a permanent
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 but don’t like what they are doing. A good example for
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 are those who are volunteering in some undeveloped countries, where the
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 of helping others is much more important than the
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 they have, as a consequence, they
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 better. In conclusion, I think that for both types of people comfort should be the only thing to value in a workplace and other things
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 as the
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 a
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 produces or not shouldn’t be as important. If people working in any kind of workplace was fully happy and satisfied with their
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, the efficiency of these would improve.

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