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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 hold different views about whether
people
 should have the freedom to produce
noise
 or comply with some regulations
of
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it
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. In my view, it is important that
noise
 making be put under control. On the one hand, it is understandable why some
people
 believe in their rights to generate
noise
 freely. As
people
 these days often have to suffer from considerable stress at work or school, they tend to find an effective way to relieve it. In some cases, recreational activities
such
 as karaoke singing or party holding can bring a certain amount of relaxation, mitigating stressful situations for everyone. If too strictly imposed, any restriction
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noise
 may deter
people
 from gaining access to one of the useful methods of relaxing.
However
, I can understand the arguments against
noise
 makers.
Firstly
, excessive levels of
noise
 can cause serious disturbance to the nearby residents who
also
 have the
rights
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 to take a proper rest after a tiring day. Those who are affected by the loud sounds from their neighbours may not only be unable to relax but
also
 have their levels of discomfort increased. In the long term,
this
 will definitely have a negative impact on their quality of life. Another reason for
this
 opinion is that too much
noise
 can produce detrimental effects on the health of the unintentional hearers.
For example
, constant exposure to
high pitch
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noise
 can result in auditory problems,
for
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 hearing loss. Hearing-impaired individuals are very likely to experience difficulty in their daily life. In conclusion,
although
 there are good reasons why
people
 should be allowed to make as much
noise
 as they wish, in my
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 some appropriate controls are necessary.
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Ensure you provide specific examples to reinforce your main points, helping to clarify your arguments further.
coherence cohesion
Aim to enhance connections between ideas for even smoother transitions, which will strengthen coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical and clear structure, with separate paragraphs explaining each viewpoint effectively.
task achievement
Both perspectives on the topic are comprehensively discussed, and a personal opinion is clearly presented in the conclusion.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced argument, using reasoned explanations to support both sides of the discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • noise levels
  • stress
  • disturb sleep
  • imposing legal restrictions
  • peaceful living environment
  • tolerance levels
  • personal freedom
  • business operations
  • designated quiet zones
  • commercial and industrial zones
  • urban areas
  • public awareness campaigns
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