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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The given line graph elucidates the
stock
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price
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 since the
year
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 2011 until 2016 of four communication and technology companies (
Facebook
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, Google,
Apple
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 and
Yahoo
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).
Overall
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, three of all the corporations saw either an increase in their
stock
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 rates or a decrease.
Apple
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 had experienced the greatest rate of
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price
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 in comparison to others
between
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 the time frame.
On the other hand
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, Google, the company that specializes in
internet-related
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 services and products, had
been
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the only one without any alterations and had the least
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 of
stock
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 throughout the whole period. At the beginning of 2011,
Facebook
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 and
Yahoo
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 had cost the same in
stock
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 (something around 7,500) and it was the highest after all. During
this
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year
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, each of the communications companies
Apple
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 and Google
,
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 had a value of about 5000 and 1000 respectively. By the
year
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 2012,
Apple
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 saw
a
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dramatic and sharp growth, hitting the highest point ever nearly 35,000.
Facebook
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 as well, saw a slight rise up to 10,000 and it was growing up progressively.
While
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in contrast
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,
Yahoo
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 started to follow the pattern belonged to
Facebook
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, but exactly
opposite
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 of that. So the
stock
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 rate’s value began to reduce for
this
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 agency. Surprisingly, after a
year
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,
Apple
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 faced a fall as suddenly as its growth
last
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year
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. Its rate
price
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 was almost what it used to be at the starting step, but a little more.
Facebook
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 and
Yahoo
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 were following in opposite directions and they
also
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 continued with that until the end of 2016 (20,000 and approximately 2,500 value for each respectively
at the end
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 of the period).
Apple
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 had been consistently experiencing unpredictable fluctuations. It rose again in 2014,
whereas
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 it was hitting
the
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 lowest point of all.
At
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last
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, between 2015 and 2016, the
stock
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 rate for
this
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 company has improved since the past
year
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 (mostly what it was in 2011).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, price, year, facebook, apple, yahoo with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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