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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern world characterized by advanced technology and communication, the omnipresence of
internet
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the internet
, media's role in society has increased significantly. The reach of
media
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the media
 is so widespread that it controls the attitudes and opinions of
majority population
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the majority population
. In some countries media
is
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are
 wholly under the control of governments, while in others media is controlled by big businesses
.
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.
 When media
is controlled
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are controlled
 by governments, they tend to impose the ruling party ideology on its citizens.
For example
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, in the People's Republic of China,
media
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the media
 is under continuous scrutiny to ensure that nothing against the party ideology is printed in the media. When censorship is imposed, citizens are barred from realizing the real picture of society. They tend to believe what is being communicated by the media. They use media to silence rational thoughts and criticism against the government. The control
enable
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enables
 the governments to direct the opinions and attitudes of people, ensuring unquestionable loyalty. Big businesses use media to influence the decisions of customers. They make use of vibrant advertisements, celebrities, to increase the sales of their products.
For instance
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, if people are watching a particular commercial over and
again they
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again, they
 may be
induces
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induced
 to buying the product. Advertisements are persuasive and impulsive. They mislead customers into purchasing unnecessary products. Since people are heavily depended upon mass media they fall of prey to the tactics of conglomerates. In conclusion, I believe that the inevitability of mass media
have enslaved
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has enslaved
 us, killing our rationality and making us puppets in the hands of the privileged.
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