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Some people believe that technology has made men more sociable and others think it has made us less sociable . Discuss both these views nd give your opinion.

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In
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 highly competitive and contemporary era
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 is progressing at an exponential pace.While some section of population reckons that the advancement of
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 is blessing for everyone to become extrovert.
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 others are discarded with
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 statement
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 certainly vote for the former group
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 both the views will be analysed in the following paragraph before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
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 has ample of benefits to the world. To commence with,
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the first reason
 why people tend to meet
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 extrovert nature is that people can easily contact with anyone from anywhere.In a resulting they can communicate with video chat on various social networking sites
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 as Facebook, twitter,
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 and so on doesn't matter how long distance are there between them,
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 my uncle is living in Canada, I can have a daily conversation with him by using social networking sites. What is more
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 the people who are introverted can make myriad friend on social media by the advancement of
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. On the downside, the latter view suggests that people have become introvert or an
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 because
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 touched the puck.
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, offsprings are playing computer games and using the phone very excessively
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 in a consequence, youngsters are not able to interact with people around them and suffer from isolation astronomically.
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 would say that if they use it wisely
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 people will not get
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 an adverse effect. Conclusively, I reiterate that even thought
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 deteriorate the nature of people,
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 would say, people can get enormous benefit
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 as become more sociable as people can have a conversation with relatives live in out of country through social sites by using it wisely.

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