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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways.others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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There are split
opinion
 regarding Railway and New roads. Some people believe that governments should spend money on Railways. While another group of thinkers
support
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supports
 investment
into
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in
 new roads.
However
,
both
the the
definite article
the
 views has own pros and cons.
Therefore
, before commenting on my decision
both
 the
opinion
 would be discussed.
Examing
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Examine
 the former
opinion
 the primary argument the supporters put forward is, investing more money in
modern
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the modern train system
a modern train system
train
 system and it will be mean that mankind can travel
more faster
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faster
 in all over the country.
Furthermore
, development of the railway passenger
not have
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doesn't have
 to deal with the conjunction, because nowadays many people travel by
train
 and most of the middle class family. So they face many arduous, like not
comfortable
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comfortably
 sits, so much hustle and bustle, sometimes not get the healthy food in
train
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the train
.
In addition
to, governments should
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, governments should
 launch the new fast
train
 with
plethora
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a plethora
 of amenities.
On the contrary
, the latter view
suggest
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suggests
 that roads are equally important.
most
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Most
 of the people use
both
 the ways like roads and railway to commute to college or work.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
 roads are so much
worst
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bad
worse
, so every individual drive slowly and they cannot reach on time.
for
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For
 instance, they make take
bus
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a bus
the bus
 or car to reach the railway station and after that they may take the
train
 to reach their office or college.
Moreover
, If there are no roads, so public get
difficulty
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difficult
 to reach their destinations. To conclude and give my
opinion
, I would say that
both
 the things are very important in our life.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 government should give equal attention to
both
 modes of transport.
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