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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates some information about how much European
countries
 spend
it's
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its
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household
Fix the agreement mistake
households
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. The prominence of drink and food
is belongs
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belongs
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 to Turkey.36%. And the recession belongs to Germany
22
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at 22
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%. I guess the difference is not too much. Housing
also
 shows
same
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the same
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 indication. But Spanish and Turkey are spending less
that
Correct word choice
than
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 other
countries
. All
countries
 spend less
to
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on
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 clothing and entertainment. Maybe it
explained
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is explained
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 by their
economic
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economy
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.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 food and drink
always
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are always
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 required part.
Overall
, food and drink expenditure highest consumption for Turkey, housing for UK and Germany,
clothing
Correct word choice
and clothing
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 and entertainment are
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 and middle for all five
countries
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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