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the maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitors attraction site.

the maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitors attraction site.
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The maps illustrate the redevelopment project of a coal
mine
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 into a tourist attraction park. The original coal
mine
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 had various
sites
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. The
entrance
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 of a
mine
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 was located in the north between the lunch and changing rooms in the west and one of the
waste
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sites
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 in the east. Going south from the
mine
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entrance
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 there was a medical
center
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centre
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 in the west and another
waste
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 site in the east.
According to
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 the map after the redevelopment of the
mine
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, several buildings were repurposed.
Mine
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entrance
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 became the
entrance
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 to the attraction park,
while
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medical
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the medical
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center
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centre
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 was transformed into a café.
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The lunch
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Lunch room
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Lunchroom
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 and staff changing room merged together into a museum. Apart from repurposing
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mine’s
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the mine’s
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 facilities, there was a complete demolition of two
waste
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sites
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. On the place of
waste
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 site
1
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the driving circuit was built, and just
next
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 to it, on
the
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apply
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waste
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 site 2, a pond can be seen now.
In addition
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, some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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new
sites
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 were developed. A playground for kids was built from scratch on the previously empty area in the
south-east
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southeast
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.
Moreover
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,
walking
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a walking
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 track was added between the
entrance
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 and the driving circuit.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mine, sites, entrance, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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