Many people believe that individuals are responsible for their own happiness, while others think happiness is dependent on other external factors. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and examples from your experience.

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Happiness is a state of mind that many masses can easily get but for many others it would be different. Some people opine that a

person

is responsible for their own happiness while another thinks that the external factors creates happiness.

However

, I believe that the internal as well as external factors are responsible for happiness. In

this

essay, I intend to delve some reasons for it. To initiate with, every

person

has their own view to see things, ideas and perception. In the holy book of Hindus, The Bhagwagita

also

had explained through "Tunde Tunde Mani Bhinnaha!" Mean that every

person

have different mind. A good

person

is who adopt changes easily and move on from the past.

For example

, in my neighbourhood, the one family has been living since 2000 but the breadwinner of his family died due to diseases. The old

person

who had already retired 2 years ago, now understood that he needed to go to work to feed the family. They adopted Change. On opposite view, the external factors like as finance, health, environment and so on

also

affect a lot. Many families do not have enough money to survive and provide basic necessities

although

they goes for work. Some masses have health problem and suffer from decease. The recent Corona epidemic is a good example. At that time, so many families lost their family members, friends, brothers, sisters and

also

children, but at

last

all come up and deed new start of life. The environmental factor is Paramount become from it within a

second

life has been changed.

For example

, in the earthquake of 2011, homes and properties were lost by everyone. It took nearly one or two minutes to destroy the all money which was earned whole life. Everywhere only seen is knocked houses and dead bodies. To sum up, it has been said that with time passes, every wound of the body will recover but the condition is solely positive attitude.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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1Word repetition
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7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people believe that individuals are responsible for their own happiness, while others think happiness is dependent on other external factors. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and examples from your experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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