MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar:

The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. 

Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
The chart shows the trend of the
numeber
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number
of foreign
students
in Australia between 1982 and 2000. The
students
' places of origin are four countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore. We can see that
overall
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the overall
show examples
trend of
coutries
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countries
had in two decades a
stedy
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steady
study
increse
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increase
. It is interesting to see that the
number
of overseas
students
in Malaysia was around 10.000
of
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people in the first decade.
Instead
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,Instead
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the
number
of Chinese
students
sharply rose from 1.000 to 10.000. In the
last
decade
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,decade
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the
number
of
students
of
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in
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this
country was
more
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higher than the
students
of
other
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the other
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three. The trend of Indonesian
student
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students
show examples
gradually
incresed
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increased
from 1987 to 1996 when reached a high point of 19.000
of
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people in 1997.
Number
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A number
The number
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of
students
who come from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years. Afterwards, the
number
of
students
quickly rose in 1990 but
in
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the
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apply
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overall
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,overall
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the
amount
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number
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of people was the lowest regard all countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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