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The chart shows the trend of the
numeber
of foreign Correct your spelling
number
students
in Australia between 1982 and 2000. The students
' places of origin are four countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.
We can see that overall
trend of Correct article usage
the overall
coutries
had in two decades a Correct your spelling
countries
stedy
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steady
study
increse
. It is interesting to see that the Correct your spelling
increase
number
of overseas students
in Malaysia was around 10.000 of
people in the first decade.
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Instead
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,Instead
number
of Chinese students
sharply rose from 1.000 to 10.000.
In the last
decade
the Add a comma
,decade
number
of students
of
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in
this
country was more
higher than the Change the word
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students
of other
three.
The trend of Indonesian Correct article usage
the other
student
gradually Fix the agreement mistake
students
incresed
from 1987 to 1996 when reached a high point of 19.000 Correct your spelling
increased
of
people in 1997.
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apply
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of Change the article
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The number
students
who come from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years. Afterwards, the number
of students
quickly rose in 1990 but in
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the
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apply
overall
the Add a comma
,overall
amount
of people was the lowest regard all countries.Change the quantifier
number
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